Writing new paragraph openers and closers.
Search the Internet for a paragraph on a topic of your choice. Then, paste the paragraph directly onto the blog. (Don't forget to include a reference) Next, underline the topic sentence and concluding sentence in the original paragraph. Finally, write a new topic sentence and a new concluding sentence in your own words below the original paragraph.
The deadline for comments on this post is Thursday 11th June 09.
This week's topic is worth double credit.
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Venus is the second-closest planet to the Sun, orbiting it every 224.7 Earth days. The planet is named after Venus, the Roman goddess of love. Except for the Moon it is the brightest natural object in the night sky, reaching an apparent magnitude of −4.6. Because Venus is an inferior planet from Earth, it never appears to venture far from the Sun: its elongation reaches a maximum of 47.8°. Venus reaches its maximum brightness shortly before sunrise or shortly after sunset, for which reason it is often called the Morning Star or the Evening Star.
ReplyDeleteSource: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Venus
New topic sentence: Venus is planet which located between the first planet Mercury and the third planet Earth.
New Concluding statement: there is time when venus shows its brightness which is before sunrise and a moment after sunset which make venus being named the Morning Star or the Evening Star.
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ReplyDeleteSaturn has a prominent system of rings, consisting mostly of ice particles with a smaller amount of rocky debris and dust. Sixty-one known moons orbit the planet, not counting hundreds of "moonlets" within the rings. Titan, Saturn's largest and the Solar System's second largest moon (after Jupiter's Ganymede), is larger than the planet Mercury and is the only moon in the Solar System to possess a significant atmosphere.
ReplyDeletenew topic sentence: Saturn has a beautiful ring that consist of debris and dust.
new concluding sentence : Saturn's moon is the second largest moon in the outer space.
reference: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Saturn
Internet
ReplyDeleteThe Internet is a global system of interconnected computer networks that use the standardized Internet Protocol Suite (TCP/IP). It is a network of networks that consists of millions of private and public, academic, business, and government networks of local to global scope that are linked by copper wires, fiber-optic cables, wireless connections, and other technologies. The Internet carries a vast array of information resources and services, most notably, the inter-linked hypertext documents of the World Wide Web (WWW) and the infrastructure to support electronic mail, in addition to popular services such as online chat, file transfer and file sharing, online gaming, and Voice over Internet Protocol (VoIP) person-to-person communication via voice and video.
topic sentences: Internet is one of the communication program that connect the people through networks,
concluding sentence : internet is the most very popular communication way that used by all people in this world, and consist of website, email tools, discussion form, and searching engine.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Internet
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ReplyDeleteDessert is a course that typically comes at the end of a meal, usually consisting of sweet food but sometimes of a strongly-flavored one, such as some cheeses. The word comes from the French language as dessert and this from Old French desservir, "to clear the table" and "to serve." Common desserts include cakes, cookies, fruits, pastries, ice cream, and candies.
ReplyDeletereference :http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dessert
topic sentence: dessert is a finale of a meal that normally sweet in cover and has a strong of a taste
concluding sentence: the ordinary one include cakes, cookies, fruits, pastries, and candies
When many people hear the word Africa, they picture steaming jungles and gorillas. Hollywood films have shrunk the public image of this immense, varied continent into a small segment of its actual diversity. To have a more accurate picture of the whole continent, however, one should remember that there are, roughly, three Africas, each with its distinct climate and terrain and with a style of life suited to the environment. The continent can be divided into the northern desert areas, the southeastern grasslands, and the tropical jungles to the southwest.
ReplyDeleteSource: http://www.taft.cc.ca.us/newTC/Academic/LiberalArts/OWL/SAMPFIVE.HTML
New topic sentence: In people perception, Africa represent as jungle and gorillas.
New concluding sentence: To conclude, the continent can be classifies into three categories there are the northern desert areas, the southeastern grasslands, and the tropical jungles to the southwest.
Money is anything that is generally accepted as payment for goods and services and repayment of debts. The main functions of money are as a medium of exchange, a unit of account, and a store of value. In the past, money was almost always commodity money, money with intrinsic value from the commodity of which it is made (eg. gold and silver coins, shells, tobacco leaves, grain). However, modern monetary systems are based on fiat money – money without intrinsic value, but declared by a government to be legal tender, that is, it must be accepted as a form of payment for 'all debts, public and private'.
ReplyDeletereference: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Money
Topic sentence : Money is a acceptance for payment or exchange between people and a common way for all people around the world
Concluding sentence : However , nowadays people found trading exchange of goods is difficult and so government declared the modern monetary system (paper money) for transaction.
The Sun is the most prominent feature in our solar system. It is the largest object and contains approximately 98% of the total solar system mass. One hundred and nine Earths would be required to fit across the Sun's disk, and its interior could hold over 1.3 million Earths. The Sun's outer visible layer is called the photosphere and has a temperature of 6,000°C (11,000°F). This layer has a mottled appearance due to the turbulent eruptions of energy at the surface.
ReplyDeletereferences : http://www.solarviews.com/eng/sun.htm
topic sentences : The Sun takes up almost all mass in the solar system..
concluding sentences : we could see that sun has made the highest temperature object in our solar system
Conflict is actual or percived opposition of needs, values and interests. The conflict can be internal or external. Conflict as an concept can help explain many aspect of social life such as social dissagreement, conflict of interest and fight between individuals, groups, or organizations. In political term, "conflict" refer to wars, revolutions, or other struggles, which may involve the use of force as in the term armed conflict. Without proper social arrangement or resolution, conflict in social setting can result in stress or tensions among stakeholders. When an interpersonal conflict does occur, its effect is broader that two individual involved, and can effect many associate individuals and relationships, in more or less adverse and somotimes even humorous way
ReplyDeleteReferences : http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/conflict
Topic sentences : Conflict is mean percived opposition of needs which can be internal and external.
Concluding sentences : Interpersonal Conflict can effect more or less adverse to individual or relationships.
http://www.custom-essays.org/examples/Marriage_Hollywood_Narrative_essay.html
ReplyDeleteMarriage has always been an “event” in the life of every single man not depending on his “roots” or “origins”. The decision to get married is one of those that require not only the emotional aspect of mutual feelings, which are supposed to exist, but also the ability to look around and see whether the choice is right. In other words marriage in all cultures is the start-point of a “new” life, full of care, love and devotion to the chosen person. It is something very private. The more the decision is weighted the bigger is the probability of a happy matrimony.
*new topic sentences:
Marriage is not only going to change the status of someone, but marriage will be more everlasting if based on the love and affection.
*new concluding sentences:
As we know there are so many example of exploitation of marriages now days, so the bad example of marriages can become the life lesson to pass the marriage, and the marriages that based on love can become a good example to follow by others.